It all went down at the kickback in NY at the Ramada Hotel .
The party had just started at 9:00. The minute
Jalil & his boys arrived the spotlight turned on them .
Jalil swear he was tuff he was just alittle sissy.
Then his boy Quan dropped out of high school to start selling weed. Last but not least this boy name Mir . He was so funny , he loved to get high all day long .
Meanwhile when the kickback was getting live Jalil & his boys was cooling throughout the whole night .
Everybody was drinking/smoking basically having a good time .
Jalil & Mir was wasted they couldn't control there selves .
The DJ started playing lil durk and Quan started rapping .
He didn't even know the lyrics he was rapping to fit in .
Later on about midnight Quan bagged him a shorty by the name of Shay .
She was short with a gigantic gap between her 2 front teeth .
Jalil & Mir was just laughing at him because she was ugly they knew his boy could've done better than that .
The party start to get cheeks so Mir & his boy Jalil left the telly to go smoke .
As soon as they stepped out the door the cops snatched up Mir & Jalil.
Jalil tried to fight the cop but they pepper sprayed him .
While Mir was getting checked by the cop they found marijuana on him.
Jalil was cursing Mir out for getting caught because they both was getting a fine .
Eventually they both end up fighting in the car .
Jalil he was so scared of jail because he heard about what the older man do to boys like him .
Jalil was explaining to Mir that they was going to get raped in prison.
What the old man who do to little boys like them was horrible .
When they got into there cell Jalil peed on himself he was so nervous .
When they they shower that night Mir makes a mistake and drop the soap.
The man that was behind him was about to beat him until Jalil recused him.
Mir wanted to fight so bad , but he knew he wouldn't win so he punk out .
Finally Jalil his boy Quan to come pick them up because they couldn't I've in that hell hole any longer.
When Quan finally arrived he had to pay a a4500 dollar bail .
Quan was so mad but he do anything to free his friends.
Shortly after they left Quan gives them a speech .
Next time they was to get locked up he wouldn't come rescue them .
Jalil & Mir lesson was to neer go out the house with drugs on them .
They swore to Quan they'll never spoke again until they was 21 .
Ofcourse they didn't listened but they knew not to get caught .
They was so terrified in jail they knew they had to do the right thing or else .
Entertaining Story, this shows potential!
ReplyDeleteSetting: 4
Characters:3
Conflict:4
Grammar and Spelling:3
Requirements:3
Dialogue:3
Grade: 84%